Untamed temerity
Broke the morning air with an uneven stride,
stole three kisses from a bachelor’s loving bride.
Surely I was happy I had nothing of worth to hide,
been working so hard to turn down my secular pride.
Wave after wave kept rolling on their wetted sand,
kept my powder dry, my canon close to my left hand.
the nihilistic brotherhood of toff’s couldn’t understand,
you pluck no other’s strings if you’re a one man bland.
Respects are paid my dues are or maybe coming next,
complicated yes, but what can anyone else expect.
Wrote a few rules but didn’t understand or right a text,
all the old authoritarians seemed awfully conned vexed.
Won’t care for debt, tore a new arsehole through life‘s rule,
why do so many people wait for their joy to begin.
Get up off your knees please declare their palate gruel,
you don’t need their ways having your fun is not a sin.
Order I hear them shout, but this order is for who,
they're the ones flying high in comfort throughout.
Governed by the laws they never seem to give due,
we can’t be the same we have a nose not a snout.
So I am not ever going to bend an unassuming knee,
there’s to much anger, fight and life left in me.
I don’t much care for those who can’t or won’t see,
they can’t tame us, if our hearts and minds are set free.
Comments
roscoe, check the spelling of the title :)
this is a powerful write
a couple of typos apart from the title
'you pluck no other’s strings if you’re a one man bland' --- do you mean 'band'? or is 'bland' a play on words?
'Get up of your knees please declare their palate gruel' --- ?'off'
'their the ones flying high in comfort throughout' --- ?'they're' - my favourite line o might add
i like this write - the last line says it all
great rhyme
good rhythm
and the whole work oozes with the emotions of
'there’s to much anger, fight and life left in me'.
love judy
xxx
Thank you,
Thank you Judy, and i'm sorry about the typos, but yes i did mean bland. Love Roscoe..
Powerful write
I like it all..ESPECIALLY
"So I am not ever going to bend an unassuming knee,
there’s to much anger, fight and life left in me.
I don’t much care for those who can’t or won’t see,
they can’t tame us, if our hearts and minds are set free."
thanks for sharing...
Thank you,
Thank you Rula, glad you enjoyed this . Regards Roscoe...
Bloody brilliant, a poem after my own heart,
intelligent and thoughtful.
A few typos-
all the old authoritarians seemed awfully conned [,] vexed.
Get up [off] your knees please declare their palate gruel,
Thank you,
Thank you Jess, i have fixed the typo (off), but conned vexed, was meant as a play on words. Thanks again Reagards Roscoe..
I am pleased to be caught on a play on words
it teaches me not to get too rigid in my thinking.
thank you.
Every time I read , I like it more
I really like this piece , I have bookmarked it and guess what ?Nominated it too...
I don't know much about the system of the contest here as I am still new but I wish it will win .
P.s Last stanza..second line ,many be [ too much ] instead of to much
Thank you,
Thank you again Rula, it's great that you still enjoy this poem. Love Roscoe...
Roscoe
I found this a brill piece of writing and I checked on the title as one does when there is a query, and the word you use "temerity" where the heck do some of you find these words as this one fits the poem perfectly, especially the Rash bit..
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temerity
1400–50; late Middle English temeryte < Latin temeritās hap, chance, rashness, equivalent to temer ( e ) by chance, rashly
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Keep up the Thesaurus word search I am going to bring out my Slang dictionaries and see if I can beat this write,
Yours Ian.T
Don't know,
Don't know when or how i first heard it, but i've known about this word well it seems like forever. Thank you for your comments, and your intrest Ian, Regards Roscoe..
skillful
This is your first poem I have read. All I can say is you know your flow.
Really good.
Thank you,
Thank you, it's good of you to comment, and could i say a heartfelt welcome to Neopoet. Regards Roscoe...