You lulla bye me for sure
your lovely poetry,
I do surely adore
to the core,
what's more of desire can one dream
but a lulled up poem
up the stream,
of imagination
quivering faith
as I go off to sleep
lulled by your fabulosity
ere it does keep me
in a fairyland
I do see
Mar 23, 2012
Lulla , Lulla Bye
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Loved...
nice to meet you, nice to read you ;)
I went to your page and this poem caught my attention...
you captured the melody of the title in the whole poem and that makes for such an interesting read. every line was a surprise and although the rhymes you have are simple and smooth, every new line is unexpected and fresh, taking the reader (or at least this reader) on a lyrical ride.
may I suggest adding a final word at the end? I feel the ending to be a bit too open, too unconcluding. I believe that a final word would round the poem off. but that's just me... :)
I enjoyed reading this and am off to read another!
your Proprietress
I love folks who love me ...and no two poems of mine
I love folks who love me ...
and
no two poems
of mine have any commonality,
at times i am abrupt
glad you place before me
and
it would help an edit
if there could one be.
thanks ur great
I have a nice feeling