scribbler
Mar 02, 2012

AFTER WORK

* Here goes scribbler traveling unfamiliar territory again. Another attempt at poetic prose...........stan

Knocked off today an hour early
(old knee was screaming way too loud.)
Between it and such warm March first
there was excuse aplenty.

So down the old two lane road I went
eyes roaming through the dirty windshield
of my old red pick up truck.

All the maples had a blush
as buds prepared to open.
Or maybe they had just wakened
and were embarrassed at having spent
the past winter naked.

Along with them the hybrid pears
were on verge of reaching full bloom.
And dogwood buds were sizzling
before exploding into white earth bound clouds.

As I passed through a tired cross road town
daffodills and yellow bells showed gold.
both scattered and in neat rows
in front of
little clapboard houses.

I then detoured from my usual route
and headed toward a mountain river
misplaced at too low elevation
yet of high land qualities all the same.

For it cuts through a granite gorge
with rushing waters mainly white.
The former home of a stone dam
which has gone the way of
the textile mode of life.
Disappeared like last week's dreams.

So I pulled off the winding road
to sit and watch the liberated water flow.
The on sound was gentle rapids
and wind warming through the pines
and cliff-hanging mountain laurels.

The lowering sun reflected off
the ripples on riffles
like tinsel on a forgotten
Christmas tree.

Then a car came by.
Reminding me :
time to stop scribbling
and head on home.

So I cranked up my truck and crossed
the rusty old steel truss bridge.
A half mile to a turn around
still in sight of Twelve Mile river.
And marked with a sign
SOLD
Which reminded me of the rumors
about coming river front condominiums.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

emogothgirl

for an attempt i'd say it was a pretty good one.
always,
mag

S

For a mainly rhyming poet like myself it never seems "right" to put something down with neither rhyme nor meter lol.But trying different forms refreshes my hollow head....................stan

S

It takes getting used to both to write and read lol. Thanks for the visit............stan