lou
lou
Jan 04, 2012

suggestion

I long to set myself free
push the boundaries.
Open my mind,,gain knowledge
Expand my point of view 

Internal versus external satisfaction
Why not strive to be
Well informed, well read,  set for adventure  
With a healthy dose of pop culture.

I have achieved a mere suggestion
the tip of the ice burg,
of what i can achieve.
need to reach my potential.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

Nordic cloud

This I hesitate at imbibing, some is good and some is wonderful, but much is ........

The last verse stumbled a bit for me and repeated a little too. Tip OF the iceberg? You could loose the A then it would make more sense perhaps.

Letting then let. Well I can't rewrite it but there are my points about it.
Ann

lou

lou

13 years 3 months ago

thank you, i will work on it.

lou

Candlewitch

I too, want to push those boundries and find new horizons! I also feel that I have barely scratched the surface in some areas. I can much relate to your poem. Sorry for the lack of critique, but I liked what I read.

always, Cat

lou

lou

13 years 3 months ago

thank you

Love Lou