Transcendent
The wind carries me
across the face
of the ample full moon,
so pregnant with light,
it looks likely to burst.
wind, robust and hearty,
chasing the clouds rapidly,
obliquely, and temporarily
obscuring Luna's face,
then clearing it once again.
I ride the currents
with heart in throat,
trying to sing my pleasure,
but it comes out
a resonant hum,
reverberating throughout
my entire being.
I sense the light waves
as they caress and saturate my soul.
I am awash with brilliance
in the delight
and quiver of astral travel.
Dec 26, 2011
Transcendent
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Dear Beau,
I can't thank you enough for the amazing indepth review of my poem! Though your insight you have provided me with invaluable assistance for making my poem better. You ar spot on, with my problem areas. Especially pucuation. I am so glad you injoyed this piece! I look forward to you reviewing my other works!
always, Cat
Dear Lonnie,
Thank you from the bottom of my little black heart! I am so glad you enjoyed it. You always give the nicest, most encouraging comments. Happy New Year!
always, Cat
Cat
How can I find fault where there is none. Very descriptive and image provoking indeed.
Chrys
Thanks, Chrys!
and thank you for the help you provided on that bad poem I e-mailed you! Thank you for understanding and being there for me. I hope this new year will be the best you've ever had!
Love, Cat
Ahh my dearest Kitty Cat...
Though completely unrelated, I thought of the book "Heartlight", by the same dude who did Merlin... his name escapes me. Anyways.... in that book, a little girl merges her 'heartlight' with that of the universe, and travels amidst the stars faster than the speed of light.
Wonderfully descriptive, and I found myself visualising every word. Nicely done, friend.
Dearest Jess,
First of all, it is WONDERFUL to see you here! I hope to see more of you and to read your works,as well!
I haven't read that book, but if you think of the author, please let me know! I would love to read it.
Have a very Happy New Year!
Love, Cat
Cat
i think it's all been said, I can not say anymore except , loved it.
Lou
My Dear Lady Lou,
Thank you for your continued support and positive attitude. I appreciate you! I will get that package off to you (mail it) tomorrow.
love, Cat