docmaverick
docmaverick
Nov 29, 2011

Dimensional Dementia

Fractured psyches, Frankenstein
practicing professions
guinea pigs all in a row;

always on, slightly off
Wikipedestrian logic
dimensional dementia says it's so.
~
Plastic personalities
put Achilles heels foot forward
recycled dreams float high above the roof;

erogenous enablers
emotionality outcries,
dimensional dementia has the proof.
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anti-skeptic scandalousity
shituation's bleak
if something threatens to back-up then, just let it;

traded wills for circumstance
you crazy diamonds all shine on,
dimensional dementia deserves to get the credit.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Happy Holidays?

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates

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Comments

the_fool

it seems a bit scattered, like it's about to make a profound point but just stops.
the line 'emotionality outcries' really reads a bit off.

wikipedestrian? awesome word. original, i hope?