Roscoe Lane
Roscoe Lane
Oct 04, 2011

Sound Vision...

Sound vision…

I stared in stereo,

listened in colour

You were speaking,

that little smile was

playing at the extremities

of your lips.

I felt myself

content,

That long ago evening

we both knew…

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Her lips still fascinate as they curl..

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Scotland, Ayrshire land of Burns.., GBR

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Comments

weirdelf

when one sense is perceived as another. Alternative title?

haunting little piece, very effective.

oh, yes, her upper lip was almost prehensile and translucent, different woman I imagine [smiles wistfully]

Roscoe Lane

Thank you Jess, and forgive me as I have just came across this poem and your comments. Regards Roscoe...

S

One of the better short free verse I've read lately, but then again what does an old rhymer like me know about free verse? lol..........stan

Roscoe Lane

Thank you Stan, your comments are always welcomed. You may regard yourself as an old rhymer, but when i see how you help others here at neopoet, i would say you are a poet's poet. I think i know what i mean, lol. Regards Roscoe...

judyanne

i have nothing more to say to you because i want to read it again...
.... it is just so... so ..

as i read it the world fogs for me too
- that total feeling of awareness focusing into a central point ....

.... oh roscoe will you please go away - i have nothing more to say - i want you to leave now so i can go back and read it over and over again....

lol - oh by the way, did i say?
i really like this

love judy.