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Aug 23, 2011

LINUS' PATCH

Along a road I often follow
just about one month ago
a field was plowed which once was fallow
and seed beds were planted in a row.

Now, I thought it kind of queer
for planting season was far past
to see seed set this time of year
what type crop could grow so fast?

A few weeks passed with scattered rain
then green poked out of every mound
which got me wondering again
what was sprouting from this ground?

Well, I passed again today
green runners stretching everywhere
and large gold blossoms now hold sway
betraying which crop's growing there

Come the night of Halloween
with a nip of frost in the clear air
pumpkins' orange will be seen
and maybe Linus waiting there

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

Dear Stan,

Great title and subject matter! I love it!

Come the night of Halloween
with a nip of frost in the clear air
pumpkins' orange will be seen
and maybe Linus waiting there

always, Cat

hi Cat

Saw a pumpkin patch growing nearby and couldn't help thinking of Linus and the great pumpkin lol..........stan

hi Rose

I spent the first 12 years of my life in cities . I guess that's why I appreciate the countryside so much. Ploughed and plowed are both accepted spelling but plowed is used over here mostly. Reckon I'll change seedbed though. thanks.PS my spell check just displayed ploughed as a misspell lol................stan

Stan

Linus!! I have to come back here with my ideas. It is too late now but to help you out in this one. It is good but I am being honest..Linus's patchings need a bit of work.

Nite notes for now from Ms Mona

Smile

ps I thought you were on a respite??

Wink:)

Hi mona

I'm all the time making changes so feel free to give your ideas.........stan PS I never intended to be gone for long

so Global Warming

is not all that bad
pumpkins spread
and the politicians faces
ought to be red.

hi loved

I don't know, this global warming is pretty rough on this old builder/carpenter lol. Thanks for the visit.....scribbler

A cartoon reference?

Maybe most will get Linus waiting for the Great Pumpkin.

You said your self that perhaps the clue to appreciation of the depths of your poetry lies in a reference to its subtext.

Then again, maybe this is just a fun poem, although its sinister ovetones could be enhanced.

yes cartoon ref

This particular poem has no intended secondary meaning so forgive me for asking what sinister overtone you refer to. Poem was a direct result of an observed pumpkin patch...and what pumpkin patch with Any sincerity would be complete without Linus? lol............stan