We sway like leaves in the wind,
bend like twigs under pressure,
break like branches in a strong storm.
But we stand,
firm and grounded...
like trees standing eternally,
for our love has rooted,
grounding us.
Jun 26, 2011
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Almost perfect..... Forgive
Almost perfect..... Forgive me, but your poem is so good, I can't help but tweak it.
Leaves in the wind, we sway
bend like twigs under pressure,
storms break our branches
we stand like trees rooted to eternity
firm and grounded...
love has rooted us
to ground
and sky.
~A
~A
I like Ana's advice on the
I like Ana's advice on the poem here Jess, it's got a good foundation although with Aussie vernacular..rooted has an altogether other meaning lol...