i thought you know,
all my feelings for you..
but you don't think so,
said it wasn't true.
i thought you know,
i'll never let you go..
but you're not thinking so..
said a resounding "NO".
you're high..i'm low?
you're good..i'm not?
you're more..i'm less?
you're phrase..i'm dot?
a smile on your face
sends me signs that you already know,
but i only got one slap on my face,
damn!! i thought you know.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
I like this well thought out
I like this well thought out poem and don't know why no one else has commented.
Tim
thnks
thanks for the comment ^^ have a good day