CCfire
CCfire
May 13, 2011

writing poetry for lovers

youth is tough for dreamers
i write that
intending it
to be all i say

but you remember things
little ones
like
shallots are spring onions
and it leaves me
impressed
you listened

there should be
something more profound
than just outlines of myself
more to run your hands across

more lasting than
whatever 'this' is

and there again is
a reason to make you
into poetry

so 'this' is remembered
by the poet

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I hate the title lol

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: [This option has been removed]

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Melbourne, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Bukowski

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Comments

Nordic cloud

I am tempted to be unorthodox here as a friend of someone's mother was out with her boyfriend and had eaten a large does of onions, that proved fatal when she was just about to kiss him, she let off a fart and the lover ran away.

Your message is infinitely more delicately put Chez!
LuvAnn