Do not leave your core, my friend
You know the law
That which governs you
And makes you raw
Do not dismiss your call
You are the all
The rise and you are the fall
Breathe with cause
Take the walk
With pride, do not pause
By the end of war,
The truth you sought
Becomes the fruit
You sow
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Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "My core" delves into themes of self-discovery, resilience, and growth. The use of short, impactful lines creates a sense of urgency and determination in the speaker's message. The repetition of phrases like "Do not leave your core" and "Take the walk" emphasizes the importance of staying true to oneself and facing challenges head-on.
However, to enhance the depth of the poem, consider exploring more vivid imagery or specific examples to illustrate the journey of self-realization. Additionally, varying the rhyme scheme or incorporating different poetic devices could add complexity and richness to the overall composition. Lastly, consider refining the structure to ensure a consistent flow and coherence throughout the poem.
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You did very well, right up to the point where you tried to rhyme the word [sought] with [sow]. the word sought, is pronounced
Sawwt. Nice job otherwise. ~ Geezer.
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