The walls have tears
when footsteps fall
in sorrowful ears.
May 06, 2024
Dawn Hangs Low When Mist Abides
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
The walls have tears
when footsteps fall
in sorrowful ears.
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Dawn Hangs Low When Mist Abides" presents a somber and reflective tone through its concise imagery. The use of personification in "The walls have tears" evokes a sense of sadness and vulnerability, while the line "when footsteps fall" adds a layer of melancholy and heaviness to the atmosphere. The phrase "in sorrowful ears" further emphasizes the emotional weight of the scene. To enhance the impact of the poem, consider expanding on the imagery and exploring different ways to convey the theme of sorrow and loss. Additionally, experimenting with the structure and rhythm of the poem could help create a more dynamic and engaging flow.
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This is a Haikuesque poem.
This is a Haikuesque poem.
This is a Haikuesque poem.
This is a Haikuesque poem.
Welcome back...
old friend. I get your new perspective. Glad to see you. ~ Geez.
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all space is...(pre)occupied
all space is...(pre)occupied Mr. G.
Perhaps "fearful ears"? Obi.
Perhaps "fearful ears"?
Obi.
No, I was wrong,
No, I was wrong,
this is of grief isn't it?
Obi.
Indeed
Indeed
Grief is a thief hiding in plain sight,