Observing The Canvas Of Nature

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem, "Observing The Canvas Of Nature." I appreciate your unique perspective on nature and the vivid imagery you've created. Here is my feedback:

1. Consider refining your use of language: While your poem contains some interesting descriptions, there are instances where the language could be more precise and evocative. For example, in the line "Pitta patter rain and reflection slapping shoes," the phrase "pitta patter" feels a bit vague. Consider using more specific language to convey the sound of raindrops hitting the ground.

2. Develop the central theme: It seems that your poem is exploring the relationship between nature and human-made objects, such as ancient chipped poles and a church-shaped missile. However, this theme could be further developed to provide a clearer and more cohesive message. Consider expanding on the significance of these objects and how they relate to the overall observation of nature.

3. Structure and flow: Pay attention to the flow of your poem. Some lines

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difficult to explain how I get the emotion here.
I just know that some of your descriptions are spot on.
The line: "Pitta patter rain and reflection slapping shoes", makes me think of a light rain
and shoes polished to such a sheen, that they reflect shadows of objects close to the ground.

One would think of the line: "Unlit branches and church shaped missile ready", that it gives the impression
of black, rain drenched branches of trees, silhouetted against the backdrop of a church steeple
poised like a missle to the heavens. I have tried to make the form look more balanced,
but cannot think of how to do it. ~ Geezer.
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