We invited the sun to join us.
To come out from behind that sullen cloud
and share with us late in the morning.
With amber light breaking through,
in tow as company for the day,
our hands were together and warmed
but not by the busy sun.
No offense was taken,
our yellow star assured us,
as we walked between the shadows
being painted all around us.
Last Few Words: Kicking off the new year with some scribblings!
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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