Love Of A Lifetime

The relationship described in this poem is exactly what most people want, but few really find. I like to think that Cat and I have a similar relationship. The poem beautifully describes a life lived with a soul mate.

My only suggestion is to re-think the second line in the fourth verse: Our love deepens, solid as the earth's base.

Although the concept is good, the rhythm of the poem is thrown off. Although not quite right, "...solid earth's base" would fit the rhythm and rhyming scheme.

Overall, though, a beautiful poem.

Each new poem you write is better than the last! The title is wonderful as it suits the piece like hand in glove! my favorite lines are:

So let us wander, hand in hand,
Exploring depths of this enchanted land.
For in this journey, we have found,
A love of a lifetime, forever profound.

It reminds me of what I have with Steven! Great work!

*love, Cat

that this is the best rhythm you have written yet! I love the poem; the content is great, and you make sense in every way.
However, I am most impressed by the meter where you have made significant strides! Whatever you did, keep doing it.
I see that you have already edited the lines that Unca Fez spoke of, but I have another place that I would look at.

"Our love burns bright, igniting heights". I think that you could actually say [lighting the heights];
because you do not [burn] the heights, while lighting them is possible. ~ Geez.
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the [the] to it, to make the meter right. ~ Geez.
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This is beautiful, Clentin. I was blessed to have shared a marriage like this, and though my husband has been gone for quite some time, the appreciation still remains. Well done!
I might switch up the final two lines a bit:
"For in this journey, forever profound,
A love of a lifetime we have found."
Simply to match and wrap around back to your second line.
Thank you!
L