LOVE AND LIGHT

A way to live longs for a way to love,
Utmost reverence for the source of life,
Love paves paths, only with the whispers of light,
In this realm, in this race, we're sheeps bearing lamps,
Love and light, poisons to cross life's line

Love and light, two rights in our sights,
Learn not to love only, bear some light,
For Darkness pounces on weapons not so bright,
Sinister cowards, they who for love fight,
When their taste buds are strangers of light
Love and light, hope in eerie nights

A way to live yearns for a way to love,
A ministry of truth bears no light without love,
But a shambolic fellowship without a dove,
Love is pure, the very gift hate can't shove,
Love's peace, no lust, all from above,
Love and light, Living verses for all who live

Love and light, two might in our sights,
A shepherd clinging to his sheep's so tight
This is the way which seems right
Love and light, healing for our sorry plights

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About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , NGA

Favorite Poets: Niyi osunadare

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Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Love and Light" explores the interconnectedness of love and light in our lives. The imagery of love as a path paved with whispers of light is evocative and creates a sense of beauty and transcendence. The poem also touches upon the contrast between love and darkness, emphasizing the importance of embracing both love and light in order to navigate life's challenges.

One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the metaphors and imagery used in the poem. For example, you could expand on the idea of love as a ministry of truth and explore how it brings light into our lives. Additionally, you could consider incorporating more sensory details to enhance the reader's experience and create a stronger emotional impact.

In terms of structure, the poem follows a consistent rhyme scheme and rhythm, which helps to create a sense of musicality. However, there are a few instances where the flow of the poem feels slightly disrupted due to the use of forced rhymes or awkward phrasing. For example, in the

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