When God at first man,
Having a glass of blessings standing by,
Fulfilled, graceful, drowned in self pride,
He poured his spirit upon all flesh,
"Fill the world, heal, conquer" he instructs,
No obstacles, everything working for good,
Occupy, orchestrate the performances of the little creatures,
Strengthen the wall, master all corners, making your purpose count.
Purpose, the very essence of living,
We are made, shaped, embedded into a plan,
Our maker is never a player, perfect planner,
What's a journey without a direction, what's a way without a path, what's a man without a purpose
To will forward, what steers the wheel?
Even the trees shudder in one direction, controlling the soil of nature,
Lion's roar scolding the weakness of the hyenas,
The ants, little large store foods, beating the cowardice of famine,
Don't the flowers bloom in their own little way,
What's your mind's call?
What's your purpose?
Comments
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "PURPOSE" explores the concept of purpose in life and the importance of having a direction. The imagery used, such as God pouring his spirit upon all flesh and the examples of nature, effectively convey the idea of purpose as an inherent aspect of existence. The poem also prompts the reader to reflect on their own purpose and the significance of their actions.
One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the theme of purpose throughout the poem. While the concept is introduced and explored in the first stanza, it becomes less prominent in the subsequent stanzas. Consider expanding on the examples of nature's purpose and how they relate to human purpose. This would help strengthen the overall message of the poem and provide a more cohesive structure.
Additionally, the poem could benefit from more varied and precise language. While the imagery is evocative, some phrases, such as "master all corners" and "making your purpose count," could be replaced with more specific and vivid descriptions. This would enhance the impact of
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