ABILITY IN DISABILITY

Ever think of drowning, ending all in a frown,
Solace in stigma, struggling to fit in,
Image cracked, a whole different shape from the others,
A piece missing,fingers not striking equal
A stain they say, a "bad omen" to our culture they proclaim,
Nothing worth living for, nothing worth striving,
Live above it all, for billion reasons speak,
Ability still lives in disability

Ability swells in disability,
Peace lives in pieces, plagues still get plaques,
No hex, just a being in gorgeous glory,
You can be a difference and make the difference clear,
Never strike out your star for a mar,
Zonk not, sink no more, nor wallow in reject,
Assign your sign, set your mark on the stony walls of success,
Raise your shoulders high, it's your dignity,
Win the war, wallow the wicked in weakness,
Tell the world your strength, live, think big,
Ability still lives in disability

About This Poem

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About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , NGA

Favorite Poets: Niyi osunadare

Comments

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "ABILITY IN DISABILITY" explores the theme of finding strength and potential within one's disabilities. The overall message of resilience and determination is evident throughout the poem.

One suggestion for improvement would be to enhance the use of imagery and metaphor to create a more vivid and engaging experience for the reader. For example, in the line "A piece missing, fingers not striking equal," you could consider expanding on this metaphor to provide a clearer visual representation of the idea being conveyed. This would help to strengthen the impact of your message.

Additionally, consider varying the rhythm and structure of the poem to add more depth and complexity. Experimenting with different line lengths, stanza breaks, or incorporating poetic devices such as enjambment or repetition could enhance the overall flow and musicality of the poem.

Overall, "ABILITY IN DISABILITY" conveys a powerful message of resilience and the potential for greatness within adversity. By refining the use of imagery and exploring different poetic techniques, you can further enhance the impact

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