Merry
More than a smile
A feeling from within
Doing things better every day
Happy
Sep 12, 2023
Happiness
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Merry
More than a smile
A feeling from within
Doing things better every day
Happy
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem titled "Happiness" is a brief exploration of the theme of joy. It seems to suggest that happiness is more than a superficial expression (a smile), but rather a deep-seated feeling that motivates one to improve daily.
The poem could benefit from a more vivid use of imagery and metaphor. Currently, the poem is quite literal and straightforward. For instance, instead of saying "A feeling from within," the poet could use a metaphor or simile to convey this idea in a more evocative manner.
The structure of the poem could also be more consistent. The first line is a single word, followed by a three-word line, a four-word line, and then a five-word line. If this pattern was intentional, it could be made more clear by continuing the pattern in the final line.
Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of its theme. Happiness is a complex emotion that can be experienced and expressed in many ways. By delving deeper into this theme, the poet could create a more engaging and thought-provoking piece.
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Happiness
Hello, Clentin,
Methinks writing brings you great happiness. Fulfillment, satisfaction, peace of mind, spring to your step... maybe even goosebumps. Would love to know more about the wonderful feeling from within!
Thank you!
L
Thank you for reading and
Thank you for reading and your comments. I have been really looking at myself and my emotions. I hope to write as much as I can about what I feel as well as my goals as I proceed through life.