Choose any superpower which would you pick?
Hand shot up without a moment s thought
Loudly answered, “invisibility”
Just like that my wish came true
The following year released on my own
High school bells no longer clamored
Quote on quote entered the real world
Did not realize how invisible one can become
Simply by wearing a mask not even covering the eyes
The missing part of the face the brain could not compute
After a while internally start to feel as if disappearing
From the reactions of others becoming invisible
With the pandemic imprisoned
Inside as desolate as a tumbleweed’s itinerary
There lies a dark underbelly of Invisibility
After the light hearted chuckle of being unseen
There is an under current of duality between silence and loneliness and noise and joy
There lurks a safety net of contentment from not being seen
But like housemaids there are secrets best left untold
What others want to hide and not be raised to the light it’s best to keep hidden to protect the peace
Being invisible ultimately means being estranged from the ones you love and disconnected from the rest of the world
Comments
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Invisible" explores the concept of invisibility as a superpower and its implications in the context of the pandemic. The poem effectively conveys the speaker's experience of feeling invisible both physically and emotionally.
One suggestion for improvement is to consider the structure of the poem. Currently, the poem is written in free verse with varying line lengths. While this can create a sense of spontaneity, it may also benefit from a more deliberate structure. Consider experimenting with stanza breaks or consistent line lengths to enhance the flow and rhythm of the poem.
Additionally, the poem could benefit from further development of imagery and sensory details. For example, you mention wearing a mask, but there is an opportunity to explore the physical and emotional experience of wearing a mask in more depth. How does it feel on the skin? How does it affect the speaker's breathing or perception of the world? By incorporating more vivid and specific imagery, you can engage the reader's senses and create a more immersive experience.
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