Epitaph

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Epitaph" is a concise piece that utilizes brevity to convey a profound message. The poem seems to explore themes of mortality and the unpredictability of life.

However, there are areas that could be improved for clarity and impact. The first line, "t came while I slept," seems to contain a typographical error. If "t" is intended to be "it," correcting this would improve readability. If "t" is intended to be a specific entity or concept, providing context or explanation could help the reader understand its significance.

The second line, "Without a simple warning," effectively communicates the suddenness of the event. However, the use of the word "simple" could be reconsidered. If the intent is to emphasize the lack of forewarning, perhaps a stronger adjective could be used to intensify this sentiment.

The third line, "My call before God," introduces a religious or spiritual element. If this is the poem's intended direction, it might be beneficial to weave this theme more consistently throughout the poem, to provide a more cohesive narrative.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from the use of more vivid, sensory language to create a stronger emotional connection with the reader. As it stands, the poem is quite abstract, and while this can be effective, it may also limit the reader's engagement with the piece.

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to add, beyond saying that the AI is right, the word [simple] just doesn't get it. How about without "the slightest warning"?
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