Spiral

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Title: Spiral

The poem appears to explore themes of societal decline, political corruption, and the consequences of rejecting truth and science. The structure and imagery used in the poem effectively convey a sense of chaos and impending doom.

Suggestions for improvement:

1. Imagery: The poem uses strong imagery to depict the consequences of societal decline and political corruption. However, some images, such as "knifed in the back" and "spinmeisters driving sin as virtue," could be further developed or replaced with more original and evocative imagery to enhance the poem's impact.

2. Line breaks and punctuation: The poem's line breaks and punctuation seem inconsistent, which may disrupt the flow of the poem. Consider revising the line breaks and punctuation to create a more consistent rhythm and to emphasize key ideas.

3. Clarity: Some phrases, such as "a descent both like / and unlike / others" and "infirm liar leading to the abyss," may be unclear to readers. Consider revising these phrases to provide more context or to clarify their meaning.

4. Consistency in tone: The poem's tone shifts from a more abstract and philosophical perspective to a more specific and concrete focus on a political figure. To create a more cohesive poem, consider maintaining a consistent tone throughout or providing a smoother transition between the two perspectives.

5. Conclusion: The poem ends with a question, which can be an effective way to engage readers. However, the question's focus on a specific political figure may detract from the poem's broader themes. Consider revising the conclusion to emphasize the poem's overarching themes and to leave readers with a lasting impression.

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and shows many of the problems with our social and political system. We, the people have to be better at addressing them, we cannot stand by and not vote, we cannot tell the world that we are pissed off and not vote for the ones that we feel will make our future brighter. If they do not do as we wish, we have to vote them out and choose new people for the job. If we do this often enough, they will begin to understand that we will not accept anything less than the will of the people.
good work in managing to make yourself understood. ~ Geezer.
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