Unca Fez
Unca Fez
Jun 04, 2023
This poem is part of the challenge:

June 2023 Challenge Write your epitaph

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Epitaph For Unca Fez

He was born.
He died.
Somewhere in between he did stuff
That will be forgotten in 100 years...
But he had a hell of a good time doing it!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Region, Country: Wisconsin, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Candlewitch: I've been reading her poetry for over forty years.

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Title: Epitaph For Unca Fez

Poem text:
He was born.
He died.
Somewhere in between he did stuff
That will be forgotten in 100 years...
But he had a hell of a good time doing it!

Feedback:

1. Structure: The poem is brief and follows a simple structure, with each line presenting a different aspect of the subject's life. The structure works well for an epitaph, as it is concise and to the point.

2. Theme: The poem touches on themes of life, death, and the fleeting nature of human existence. The theme is effectively conveyed through the poem's brevity and the use of casual language.

3. Language: The poem uses informal language, which creates a sense of intimacy and familiarity with the subject. The casual tone also adds a touch of humor to the poem, which can be an effective way to deal with the heavy themes of life and death.

4. Imagery: The poem does not rely on strong imagery or metaphors, which is fitting for an epitaph. However, if the author wishes to create a more vivid picture of the subject's life, they could consider incorporating more descriptive language or imagery.

5. Suggestion: To strengthen the poem, the author could consider adding more specific details about the subject's life and experiences. This would help to create a more vivid and memorable portrait of the individual, while still maintaining the poem's concise structure and casual tone.

Overall, the poem effectively captures the essence of an epitaph and touches on themes of life, death, and the fleeting nature of human existence. The casual language and concise structure work well for the poem's purpose, but the author could consider adding more specific details to create a more vivid and memorable portrait of the subject.

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Geezer

I think you nailed it! Who will remember any of us or the things we have said or done, in a hundred years? Some of us will
leave some kind of a mark that will last for a while, but I seriously doubt that many of us will be as famous as the preceding
generations: not that we will be less profound in our musings about life, but because there is so much happening, and we are a smaller and smaller part of the life of the common person. ~ Geez.
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Unca Fez

I think that the internet and social media have blasted so much into the world that the activities of a single person are rarely seen by any. It all comes down to taking care of yourself and the ones you love and being satisfied with that.

Seren

Seren

1 year 10 months ago

I agree with all the above you nailed it on this epitaph.

Really well done so glad to have you here with us. I look forward to reading more of your work

Kudos!

Hugs Lilbit x