Tigger Kaz
Tigger Kaz
May 28, 2023

Love confides in the land of despair

Over the hill of despair
In the land of nowhere
Nowhere to hide
No place to reside

In the mist of gloom
In the living doom
Nothing but sadness
No sense of gladness

In the pits of humanity
In the chaos insanity
Nothing but fear
No words of cheer

Yet at sadness cost
All is not lost
When fear can disappear
And our gloom can clear

In the blink of an eye
In the vacant sky
Everything to cope
Yes words of hope

In the promise that's sold
In the words that are told
Everything to astound
Yes love abounds.

Over the hill of despair
In a land of care
Nowhere to hide
Where love confides.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Coventry, England , GBR

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neopoet

The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Love confides in the land of despair" explores the themes of hope and despair, with a focus on the redemptive power of love. The imagery is bleak and haunting, with the "hill of despair" and the "mist of gloom" creating a sense of hopelessness and despair. However, the poem also suggests that love can overcome even the darkest of situations, with the final stanza offering a message of hope and redemption.

One suggested line edit would be to change "In the living doom" to "In this living tomb". This would strengthen the image of sadness and despair, and add to the overall atmosphere of hopelessness that the poem creates.

Overall, "Love confides in the land of despair" is a well-crafted poem that effectively captures the themes of hope and redemption. The imagery is vivid and evocative, and the message of the poem is both poignant and uplifting. The suggested line edit would only serve to enhance an already impressive work of poetry.

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L

Honestly I'm an enthusiastic idiot TBF but I felt the rhythm really boldly like I wanted to beat my Cajon whilst reading this . This is a beautiful powerful chant of hope and love beyond the hurt ..or at least as I read it . Well done I would love to read more.