Rula
Rula
Apr 01, 2023
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At The Holy Month Of Ramadan

The holy month's crescent appears,
to fill the hearts with joy, and please,
to bless the world with real relief;
the less fortunate; those in need.

The holy month's crescent appears,
to demolish the poor's heavy tears,
to call for mercy and spread out peace,
not only then, but through out the year.

The holy month's crescent appears,
at the ninth's month of the Islamic year,
the Muslims fast, pursue good deeds
and call to cheer up all their peers.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Overall, "At The Holy Month Of Ramadan" is a well-crafted poem that beautifully captures the spirit and significance of Ramadan. The repetition of the opening line emphasizes the importance of the crescent's appearance and sets a contemplative tone that carries throughout the poem.

The language is simple and accessible, but there are moments of poetic flourish that elevate the poem, such as the phrase "to demolish the poor's heavy tears." The poem's message of compassion and solidarity is clear and inspiring, making it a perfect fit for the holy month of Ramadan.

One suggested line edit would be to replace "apears" with "appears" in the final stanza for correct spelling. This small change would not only improve the poem's clarity but also enhance the overall professionalism of the piece.

Overall, "At The Holy Month Of Ramadan" is a lovely poem that effectively conveys the essence of Ramadan and its universal message of generosity and kindness.

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Rula

That is really impressive and useful.
Receiving such a critique in no time gives Neopoet an extra advantage over any other poetry sites

Geezer

this story of Ramadan, gives the Muslim connection to the story of charity, and how we wish all would act toward the poor and
less fortunate. To lifting up the soul, along with the body. I cannot find anything to fault. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Hello, Rula,
Beautiful poetry. I feel the peace and goodwill throughout. I know you usually use a structured style - what lovely structure is this?
Happy Ramadan to you, my friend,
L

Rula

Thank you for the good wishes and of course for reading and commenting.
This is my own style. It's not at least a form I know.
I am happy you like it.
Thank you dear

Rosewood Apothecary

Love the double inclusion of the crescent moon symbolism and the rhythm and pace are great. Faith. Hope. Charity. I’m not a religious man. I hold all three in high regard and stockpile them in abundance.

May your holy month be filled with blessings for us all and may the faithful, the hopeful, and the charitable inherit the earth.

Tim