Grit

The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem captures the painful and emotional experience of watching a loved one suffer from a terminal illness. The use of repetition in the opening and closing stanzas effectively emphasizes the cruelty of the situation. The second stanza offers a glimmer of hope as the speaker acknowledges the strength and determination of the dying person. The third stanza introduces a new layer of complexity as the speaker reflects on how the relationship has evolved since the diagnosis. The final stanza is particularly poignant as the speaker watches the person sleep and holds onto the hope that they will not give up until they reach peace.

One suggested line edit: In the second stanza, consider changing "it's easy to forget" to "we forget" to clarify that the speaker is not exempt from forgetting the reality of the situation.

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has said everything I would have said. Even the suggested change of line, is right on point. Nice job, and welcome to Neopoet
~ Geezer.
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Hello, Richard,
This is painfully perfect - you clearly convey the feelings and emotions, along with the reality. Very well written.
Thank you for sharing, and welcome to Neopoet.
Lavender

Impressive internal rhyme,
Good format,
Well thought out.

Obi.