Hussainy
Jan 05, 2023
This poem is part of the challenge:

January 2023 Challenge My Freestyle

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MY FREESTYLE

I am the light behind a flame,
I am the king without a name,
I am different we ain't the same,
I am a star awaiting my fame.
I can paint the devil shining bright,
And wear him a mask looking nice,
I fight better with my pen than a seasoned knight,
My rhymes are too hot, hotter than ice,
I am not bragging, just trying to say,
I am a poet don't get in my way.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria, NGA

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Comments

Shelby Pryor

Love the rhyme and rhythm, it flows together very well. The last two lines sum it up so good. Impressive!

Lavender

I feel the freestyle! I tripped a bit on the line: "And wear him a mask looking nice" - I believe I understand the meaning, but it doesn't quite flow with ease as does the rest of the poem. The final line is nice and strong, you may want to switch the "into" to simply "in" my way.
I liked this very much,
L

Rula

Rula

2 years 3 months ago

I sometimes tripped into some longer lines than others, but guess this is what free style is
I am not a big fan of the free style, and it is always out of my comfort zone.
You did well here I thought and on both levels, the message and the contest requirments.
Very well done