life is mostly work and education but epiphanies appear like butterflies
or hornets in your yard sometimes a costruction worker has einstein ideas
at lunch break love at first sight happens like the butterflies
Sep 29, 2022
mysteries of life
About This Poem
Last Few Words: never give up allways hope
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EINSTEIN was a prodigy Love came naturaly to him was a BUUTERfly
Einstein ideas
at lunch break
love at first sight
as all is relative in life...
lol
happens like the
butterflies
yeah help me
and all NEO
mysteries of life
Hello, Victor,
I had fun reading this! The rhythm and run-on thoughts confused me a bit, but I am gathering that this is your style. Your reader may be challenged to interpret your meaning correctly, and may need to read your work several times, but your content and theme are obvious. I actually enjoyed this, and it is true...love at first site does happen like butterflies!
(Hopefully not like hornets.) :)
Thank you!
L