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let people see your broken heart? How is anyone to know, if you don't tell them? Sometimes it helps to let people know what's going on. I like your poem, just not the subject. You did a good job of showing the heartbreak of feeling alone. There is always someone out there to talk to. Don't be alone. ~ Geezer.
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I think you need to flesh out this poem, expand it and give more information to the reader. I think you have the basis for a much better poem!

* warm smiles, :) Cat

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There is a pretty supportive and vibrant community here. My inbox is open if you need to drop a message when your feeling alone. I check in often and there’s nothing wrong with asking for help or talking. I’m glad you’re writing about it. That’s a healthy place to go with that energy.

Keep it up
Tim