Jogging down the lane
I heard his juggling pain
Yet to figure this plan
I was lost on his arms
Why not try to mend these palms?
Myself,the drop I couldn't manifest
Bonds kept teeming in fret
But we want this one flesh
Yes,lay pliant on his glebe
Thoughts could press
Then,who will go with the pledge?
It was a mountain tale
My nib couldn't pay
I love him, how do I say?
It was an anxious tray
Glinted dimples,sliced across
Uncharted touches,smiles off course
It was an unceasing abode
I want your loin broad
Please my paramour
Try open up
Cos,I can't cover up
Your lips need those backups
I don't want make ups
But,try to take up
Am tired of regurgitating this feeling
I wish to let, but kept drilling
please stop dribbling
Am steady to care for a kiss
Not even a hug,I won't miss
Since that cry
I was lost to your page
I need to try
But please come to my aid
Oh! With you I will ply
These bird
Kept shredding like blade
For you,my nightmares turned
Indeed, these touch I burned
Am now love drunk
Comments
"Cos" should be (because)!
It is obviously an aphetic form of because. But in poetry it seems informal. So, the best way is to write in full ( because) or ('cause) instead of abbreviating it like " cos". Such style distorts a written piece!
Jackweb
Thanks so much
Hello,
Hello,
I like the structure of the poem.
My observation is that you've deviated from the ryhme pattern in stanza 2 of the poem.
'Myself,the drop I couldn't manifest
Bonds kept teeming in fret
But we want this one flesh
Yes,lay pliant on his glebe
Thoughts could press'