Love Attraction

I met you on literary platform
and I intend to ask where you from

could this be a cosmic love
or am I ruminating down from above

now I am entangled between a long distance
your love has bullied me into a sudden trance

now I am frolicking on a thin air
with a sound proof of lust and I err

if I arise above this hallucination
dare me, I will conquer your inclination

for all this cosmic love and affair
is just a cheap crawling feeling that stair

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