Music Addiction

Watching you reminds me of what I had
Seeing you always makes me glad

Missing them is all I do though
But when I listen I don't feel low

And when it stops playing I do too
Melting out in front of you

The feeling that it gives is great
Like a switch is turned on, turning off the hate

I always want to feel this way
Not just when I hit play

I hate the addiction I have to it
But it won't go away unless I for-fit

This is the feeling of freedom
Like living in my own kingdom

I'm flying with the birds
and dancing with your words

Laughing with the flowers
Everyday for hours

I never ever want it to stop
But If it does I think I'll pop

Cause I've planted this music in my head
And It won't stop till I see red

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I started watching this show and the music basically took over me. I listen to the music for hours of the day, but didn't notice anything until my mom took it away just for one day so i could hang out with them My whole body started to shake and I felt myself having a panic attack. I became addicted to the music. It was my door to the world, but now its only hurting me.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Texas USA

Favorite Poets: Shel Silverstein

Comments

Hi Viv, you've got some

Hi Viv, you've got some lovely verses in your poem, such as the ones I've pasted below.

I'm flying with the birds
and dancing with your words

Laughing with the flowers
Everyday for hours

The rest is very interesting, but it needs to be tightened up quite a lot. The content is clear, I think. I've had many panic attacks during my life. I'm not sure as to whether you like the music or hate it now. Addictions can be horrible and difficult to get rid of. But one often gets addicted to beautiful music, I see nothing wrong with that. Maybe it's excessive and worries you?
The title is fine, but, as I said, I find the content confusing. I'll return for another read when I've rested. All the best, Gracy

Actually getting addicted to

Actually getting addicted to music good or bad is not a great thing. I literally die without something in my ears. The music takes over me and literally makes me come to life. So i like it but i don't like feeling down without it.