Gracy
Gracy
Aug 30, 2020

Elegy

Shadow of a woman outlined
in a time not your own,
a halo of joy traces you
in men’s yesterdays.
Crystal skeleton,
transparency of bones gnawed by years.
Musings in other’s memories,
requiem of resonant tone
borrowed by spirits flown to oblivion.
Debris hurtling down a shuttle.

Weary of your body’s barren husk,
you wander bleak pathways, seeker of solace.
Shadowy spheres unfurl into rainbows,
cascades of colored raindrops
intone a dirge over your corpse.
I pick up bones from eerie earth,
rebuild you, hold you to my heart
in a mantle of myrrh.
Kneeling by secluded seas,
I pledge you to wind and salt,
where wraiths transmute
into pearls of infinite worth.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Río Negro, Argentine Patagonia , ARG

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath

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Comments

Gracy

Dear Jerry, it's not abstract poetry, but I understand your confusion. Sorry about that. I'm not sure I can explain it, but it's probably easier for women to "get"...hope so!
There's lots in the poem, like memories, aging, discrimination, etc., but with a happier finale, although the woman is already dead. Sound weird? You're right. Thanks for visiting and for being honest.
I'm partly inspired by Jorge Luis Borges.
All the best with the rainfall, you must need it where you live. Gracy

C

Braava there is not one error in this poem and I would not think of changing any words
this touched something deep within me
It is just pure beauty

Gracy

Thank you so much, lynn. I thought women would understand it better than men, but not strictly speaking. I'm glad it touched you, poetry should do that, IMHO. You're most kind with your comments.
All the best, Gracy

Gracy

Gracy

4 years 7 months ago

In reply to by Teddy15

Dear Teddy, interesting about the Truscan burial sites. Yes, it's theatre, most haunting, in a way.
I see that women emphasize with what I've written. I'm glad about that and expected it. You and lynn have gladenned me, if that's correct. Nowadays, I don't write or speak English as much as before, keep making mistakes.
All the best, I hope Italy is getting over the covid spell. Gracy