Geezer
Geezer
Jul 20, 2020
This poem is part of the workshop:

Idle Time Poetry

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Mine Man... [Idletime workshop]

Jealous; guard your secrets
don't give them all away
Just little, tiny bits
small pieces every day...

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I think the brevity of the poem, helps to make my point.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Geezer

because: It's MINE man. My time, my pieces of life, my personality. ~ Geez.
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R

raj

4 years 9 months ago

I like short poems but I think it is a wee bit too short. Perhaps a better title may be thought of.

Be well..

Lavender

Hi, Geezer,
When I read your poem title, I thought of those seagulls in "Finding Nemo" - mine mine mine mine! Of course the seagulls reminded me very much of the way people, especially children, act with their possessions. Reading your poem further takes on a bit different meaning for me - as if one is being extremely protective of who they are and have become. If that's the case, how does one do that?
Thank you!
L

Geezer

Exactly that! You have to have a split personality. Not just a double, but as many as... Well now, that would be telling, wouldn't it? ~ Geez.
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C

short ,abrupt , to the point so where is the rest?