Dear woman, notice you the dinosaur?
Like fire-belching dragon he is no more.
And curiosity buffs still hunt their bones
That had hid in deep earth and beneath stones.
After them still live their he-dinosaurs,
Whose scarred footprints scourge your weaker landscape
With rape and beatings that beset our shores,
And they will nature’s next selection scrape.
But he-dinosaurs are yet on the run,
Nor must we wait till nature’s course is done,
But hoist the law where’re their cleaved hooves tread,
Till their bones lay as their ancestors’ laid.
Stand proud, oh woman, like the queen you are.
Now, may we your un-bonded talents share?
Oct 06, 2019
HE-DINOSAURS
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Ndubuisi
As I am from the UK and one of the older school
my knowledge of the way you speak and write becomes a little different from say the Nigerian way.
But as poets go it is a good piece.
Can I ask you to go through our poets and if you can seek out more from your country..
Then ask them to form an African group where your poetry can be appreciated more.
The time Zone for Nigeria is near the same as the UK
so we could also join in with many things to broaden the knowledge of other peoples ways.
Start a blog where all your poets can sign in,
There are so many of your people that need to be heard in the poetry and writing circles,
Yours Ian T ( Yenti or Sparrow)