Robert Leutwiler
May 20, 2019
This poem is part of the contest:

POETIC SELFIE (May Contest)

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sun doh yan

a type of silence
is spreading

a slice of the earth
falls away

some laugh, some get fat
others over the edge venture

a type of silence
falls away, Tiangu, I defy you!

a slice of the earth
is spreading

falls away, others over the edge
the dupes write missives of apology

some rat, some sell hooks
basic precepts, basic precepts

mit einem langweiligen Buch
kann er nichts anfangen

il porte un costume sans tête
La esencia del absurdo conquista la mesa de la Autoridad!

I no longer care who wins the next election: I cannot vote
winds of disaster take over the province; we fall off the stage!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I am new here but have been writing and posting for a long time.

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: USA-- Connecticut and Puerto Rico

Favorite Poets: Essama Chiba

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Comments

Eumolpus

feeling I am reading a poet who has read a lot of poetry and understands poetry. I basically like the same poets as you, I did a masters in Rimbaud.

I don't have a clue where the poem is coming from, what is the intent or force behind it... I would like to. I have no idea why the images and narrative leads you to the conclusion to not vote...

At some point I look at a many poems and feel either I'm too dumb to figure it out, or the poet just didn't give me a clue other than in some abstract surrealism. This reader needs more, like the poetry written by the wonderful poets you admire. You always know what the poem is about.
Not what it means....that belongs to poetry. What it is about. As the man said in the end (macleash) , "a poem cannot both be and not mean. Therein lies the paradox"

R

BTW, since I will be in Puerto Rico for the next presidential election in 2020, I will not be able to vote for president only for Puerto Rican electoral candidates.