I have been trying hard
to neither forget myself
nor become plagued
with having to recall
who I was before this man
sitting sullen-faced
before a cracked reflection.
Our people say reflections crack
when onlookers stare
at mirrors without blinking.
I have bought their words
and learnt that
you can never, ever,
pause the soul,
never create a saint
out of self-pity.
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Very incitful poem
after a few reads of this short work, I would make it shorter:
Our people say reflections crack
when onlookers stare
at mirrors without blinking.
I have bought their words
and learned that (spell check)
you can never, ever,
pause the soul,
never create a saint
out of self-pity.
I think this involves me the reader without the explanation in the first stanza. The work has more punch and poetic truth. Love the opening "our people say" .
My take. Nice poem!
Thanks Eumolpus, really
Thanks Eumolpus, really appreciate.
Your poem has a unique feel
Your poem has a unique feel of a real painful and experience. A pleasure to meet you.
Thanks
Thank you Iriz. Glad you liked it.