Solemn is the word M a r r i a g e, whole, united, and sacred is its world.
Aug 06, 2018
Marriage: Gebo [Runic Symbols Challange]
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Thanks to Raj's challenge to write a liner about one of the runic Symbols. How do you think I'm doing?
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
This is a wow one liner...lovely and thoughtful....of course you are a talented poet and knew you would adapt to this form quickly and you proved me right...found this as soon as i logged in few minutes back...loved the way you have used word and world...
grinning :)..
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Thank you raj
for the supportive comment. Coming from you, it really means a lot.
now when i get to the Runic
now when i get to the Runic Symbol Gebo I will need to come up with something else...
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Sorry
Grins:-)
Hey Rula
why sorry? I don't have copyrights on Rune Symbols...in fact it would be good to have different perspectives isn't it?
;) grins back
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Ah yes of course
I'd like to see how different symbols are looked at by different eyes. I'm looking forward to reading yours.
I liked the edit you have
I liked the edit you have done here Rula..
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Hello JRS
Thank you dear. I've just noticed that different dictionaries transcribe the word 'marriage' differently.
I usually check
google translate as an application on my cell phone
Also http://www.learnersdictionary.com/definition/marriage
While yes, other dictionaries such as marriam Webster's transcribe it as of two syllables.
https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/marriage?src=search-dict-box
As
a result I see to keep it as it is but I appreciate your input and highly appreciate it.
Thank you.
Hello JRS
Thank you for taking the time and for looking deeper into the transaction thing. I don't remember I've ever studied this at school or the collage either. :)
Back to what you've mentioned about the secondary and primary apostrophe, I understand it quite well, however, I don't think it is justified why they are not at least using the (((dash))) to show they're two syllables. I mean, I know they don't usually use the secondary apostrophe, (where the syllable is not stressed) but at least they put a dash to show that the word is of two syllables or more. If there are no dashes, well that shows that the word is monosyllabic or that what I always thought.
Do you get my point?
Dear JRS
If I pronounce the word without checking the dictionary, I would simply say it is a two syllable word. I know that each vowel sound makes a syllable. However checking this one, and it shows as a monosyllable, I didn't hesitate to use it as I did in my liner.
Dear, you've helped me a lot. Please never hesitate to knock me on my back. It is such constructive feedback that helps me to improve. I've never claimed to be a poet. I am not but an amateur one who seeks to continually ameliorate. Keep up your research and please keep me up to date for any new information.
Highly appreciate it.
This is the google translate link
which I checked the first place when I wrote this, no dashes show to indicate that the word is two syllable:
https://translate.google.com/#auto/en/marriage
also all the letters in the transaction have the same font size and shape
but take for example the word interesting, yes, there are no dashes, BUT, it different syllables are written differently to show the stressed, unstressed syllables and of course that tells it has more than one syllable
https://translate.google.com/#auto/en/interesting
Hi again Rula
If at all you wish to stay out of the controversy about syllable count, how about this:-
M a r r i a g e, a symbolic word, for a whole, united, sacred world.
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Thank you dear raj
for your good suggestion. I will absolutely think over it.
Rula
you may consider my suggestion only if it doesn't lose out on the context of your message...
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Hi Rula
checked out the meaning of the word Hallow which i learn is honor as holy . If so the line would read as
Honor as holy the m a r r i a g e word; a whole, united, sacred world. ...
instead would this work better?
Hallow the word m a r r i a g e as a whole, united, sacred world.
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Dear raj
I can't thank you enough for the continuous thoughtful readings and suggestions. Hallow is a new word for me as well.
I don't mean not to use them, but I wanted this word/world to be clear when read.
Please keep up your good suggestions.
I wonder how does it read now
reads better now because
reads better now because Hallow was causing a bit of a stumble,,,if i may suggest a little tweak...how about
Solemn is the word M a r r i a g e, whole, united, and sacred is its world.
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Highly appreciated
I hate making edits. I always screw up.
continuing to bug you Rula ..
continuing to bug you Rula ...lol..
how about deleting the comma before and?
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Hello Raj
as I know, the comma is optional here. I checked the rule in one of thr trusted grammer sites and made sure.
Here I quote what I found:
The comma before the and in a list of three or more items is optional.
https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma/
Always appreciate your thoughtful bugging. (grins)
Hi Rula
okie dokie I know you are proficient in English...thanks for explaining the rule...
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