When I wake up
The sunlight’s hands reaching into my eyes
Divinity, you were a goddess I contained
We wash our pasts with the memories we regret
Skewed versions of what we want to believe
Take me far from here, to a place without fear
I welcome the change
When I fall asleep
The moon looking at me, pulling my eyes closed
Royalty, you were a peasant I adored
We cleaned our futures with dreams we forget
Altered visions of a world we will never see
Let me sleep right here, drift to a place with tears
I welcome the river.
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i could feel the contrasting
i could feel the contrasting emotions so very well scripted here...a pleasure read for me..
the title of the poem really sits very wekk here with the theme...
the last line made the poem
you know I have an antipathy to love poems but this was honest,
the line
Divinity, you were a goddess I contained [is either pretentious or self effacing, not sure which]
But to bo perfectly honest, it adds nothing to the genre of love poetry, Not your fault. It is just a genre that has been done to death.
jess, it wasnt meant as a
jess, it wasnt meant as a love poem, however i can see where it came off as that. it was meant as a contrast from being awake and dreaming, wants and gets, a dream looking in the mirror and seeing life, as life looks in the mirror and sees the dream.
thank you for your time friend.
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