What a treat from the bees
Something golden to please
They’re like a board of trustees
Taking flowers as their fees
Each a lil’ Hercules
Flying miles in the breeze
The fields their diocese
Buzzing ambrosian decrees
Even ol’ Socrates
Who said that being busy
Is just a wasting disease
Without some expertise
Would say the bees’ guarantees
Are nothing at which to sneeze
They say the moon’s made of cheese
And broccoli’s just little trees
But tastier than both of these
By a great many degrees
Is the gift of honeys —
Tip of the tongue analyses
Comments
Hi Greg
pretty tough to maintain aaaaaaaaaa rhyme sequence through and through all verses...as tough as the work honeybees do...
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The theme is overwhelming
The theme is overwhelming I think this piece is top notch you did a great job.
Through the arrangement of this piece you can bask in the arts with a good feel
Further, I like the second stanza very good in its form you wrote a materpiece
I'm encouraged to read more of your writings. Lastly, the ending takes you in let's you be a friend.
Congratulations...
on making it all the way through a very tough form! Seems like you have a thing for honey. That's as good as Honey having a thing for you! ~ Geezer.
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An inspiring read
is the least to say
This was not easy to achieve,
This was not easy to achieve, so bravo on your poetic sensibilities..