Rendition [Sunku]

on keys
of a piano
are finger prints

playing
heart touching
musical notes

some hide
their fingers
behind white gloves

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

Hi Raj,

Hi Raj,
Hm. Interesting.
Some people play with their naked spirit
and others are even afraid to take off their gloves.
I like your poem very much it shows your unique way of seeing. It is inspiring. Why don't you offer it as a prompt?

Thanks for reading IRiz

a positive comment coming from you who innovated Sunku form means a lot.....I am trying to improve on the aesthetic aspect by posting a few Sunkus especially to make the readers think and perceive it....hope I a will get there sooner or later ...practice makes one perfect as is said...so i keep trying...
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Sweet. Maybe one day we will

Sweet. Maybe one day we will publish a paper on it after all.

it would be great to see a

it would be great to see a paper published

tell you what? if you see closely recently under style/type I am already listing these Sunkus as structured eastern ...in doing so I am not breaking any rule merely bending it :)

using Trump strategy that if you go on saying fake news or no collusion a thousand times people start believing it...lol
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This one

goes over my head until I read IRiz's comment.
I'm still unable to figure out how much should the subtext be surialistic to meet the esthetics of the form

Rula

as a matter of fact the perception of IRiz is only one...there can be another....
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