gregwa8
gregwa8
May 25, 2018

Millions More Synapses

we learn to see
in ever more detail

once we were blind
but now we notice

the way even the rarest
chemicals react

the exact way she likes
her morning
coffee or tea

the way he responds
to every
different kind of touch

it is like God was
trying to teach us something

by creating the dinosaurs first
and then the lizards
millions of years later
if that's how it worked

the brain of the Cro Magnon man
and then the human counterpart

so genius and yet so micro
in comparison

with millions more synapses
in the same space
and millions more possibilities

the illustrator
the sculptor
the camera man
the linguist

we all work
from general to specific

we are loved as a human race
and as a particular
race of people
liberally

but so much more
as individuals

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: Maryland, USA

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Comments

Eumolpus

and the presentation. However I don't totally agree with it. We have learned now that civilization is at least 50,000 years older than we thought, and there is solid scientific evidence to show the sophistication of the ancient world. This is a big and hot topic for historians, most of whom still believe for example the pyramids were made as burial sites (despite the fact that all the tombs are found elsewhere and there has never been a trace of tombs in them)
We are not capable today of constructing anything like the great pyramids, the construction technique is beyond our knowledge. Any scientist, after the massive data of proof, who denies the ancient Egyptians used electricity for light is as stupid as those who argued with Galileo that world was round. There is so much information available, but all you have to do is see the artifacts left from ancient civilizations to see they had art, philosophy, and sensual sophistication to rival ours.
If anything, it is possible the ancients were actually more intelligent than we are. They clearly understood and harvested the natural forces inherent in the earth. Their mathematics were perfect, as was the jewelry. We are not more intelligent than those before us, which represent a tiny slice of time since tools were found in Ethiopia which are 2.5 million years old.
As to whether "individually" has prospered during this time... I'm not sure.

gregwa8

Thanks Eumolpus for your thoughts! I love hearing responses like this. Especially when I'm exploring topics I have so much to learn on. I'm looking more at macro evolution than the history of modern man. As well as the way we grow as individuals, noticing ever more important things. I do tend to be a bit of a progressive. But what you say about earlier civilizations being just as or more advanced is so true. The main thrust of the poem, the climax, is in the last lines. That love is most powerful when it's for real, flesh and blood individuals, not just the abstracts of race or the human race. We learn to love and receive love for who we really are, in all the dirty and divine details, I think.