Birthday.
Every year
white flowers.
Am I
dreaming? I
can't be that happy !
Phone rings.
Now I know.
My life is real.
Birthday.
Every year
white flowers.
Am I
dreaming? I
can't be that happy !
Phone rings.
Now I know.
My life is real.
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Comments
I feel
The dread that comes with every birthday, then a moment where you forget life's troubles...only to be brought back to reality.
Actually, I like birthdays
Actually, I like birthdays and usually feel so happy that can't not believe that I am not dreaming, but this time I had some news and realized that my life is not a dream but a real thing with pain.
The two comments by Carrie
The two comments by Carrie and IRiz are testimony of how the reader perceives the words differently which is one of the expected outcomes I think of a good Sunku...
Life is certainly real great write
Was encouraged to read this piece three times slowly. You have masterful words puts a smile on my face very real & emotional. The line about can't be happy is so very real and true. I'm a fan of yours and wish you the best of luck in your writings.
Superb
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