Plaintive cries of want and challenge drift through misted wood and meadow
Jun 27, 2017
Birds (indirect imagery)
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
hello!
This is pretty direct to me. Let's see what others think
You guys are right. It's too direct. Took out 'feathers',
and changed the first word. Any better?
I think I may be too literal of a person, when it comes to imagery.
yes
Sometimes indirect or unspoken imagery can be more powerful than direct imagery simply because it allows a reader to visualize things which are specific to themselves
dear Jim,
sounds like there is a duel afoot in a clearing in them thar woods! I like it!
brightest blessings.
Cat
thanks
Cat!
Yes indeed
that edit has worked brilliantly.
Jx