Roaming Facades

The sky crumbling
Loose strands
Of clouds
Prelude
To roundabouts
Of floodgates.

Gush - gush -
Breakwaters open.

Tides

Tides.

See the spectator
Rushing through the wind,

Stings
And scars
Under waded footprints.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

Region, Country: Manila, PHL

Favorite Poets: R.S. Thomas

Sorry for my late response though.