Dream Love

Walk with me in my dreams forever.
coming running in the rain and
cover your head with your yellow raincoat.
Like the sun, shining in the rain it keeps you dry
floating above the water that splashes from your feet.
I love the soft warm glow of your color and
the sound of your short fast breathing.
It is in my dreams and like a movie replaying
brings back all the joy of first love.
Never losing its brilliance or color
warming my heart and filling my soul.
So our love is like a picture that never fades
and enriches life.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: some love last forever in the heart of the receiver irrespective of the giver!

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Hawaii Big Island USApoet . i have written about 100 poems and am waiting for new inspiration!

Favorite Poets: I have never read poetry . I just sat down one day and started to write and after two years I had written 100 poems (free verse) and the inspiration to continue passed!

Comments

This reads like a lovely

This reads like a lovely dreamscape. I feel you could have selected your words a lot more carefully, but the overall effect is still warm and romantic.