Put yourself second
Aid those in need
You can make a difference
If everybody
Took a moment
For someone else
On this planet
Radical change
Would Occur
And everyone would be
Rewarded some
Day
Put yourself second
Aid those in need
You can make a difference
If everybody
Took a moment
For someone else
On this planet
Radical change
Would Occur
And everyone would be
Rewarded some
Day
Last Few Words: This is an acrostic.
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
So true. Jx
So true.
Jx
So good to see you and you know I love you but...
(that sounds ominous at the beginning of a crit, eh, it is)
Sorry to fuck up your acrostic but don't ever preach, mate, please.
I put myself second
Aid those in need
I can make a difference
If everybody
Took a moment
To stop those destroying
This planet
and make them pay
Radical change
Would Occur
And the reward would be
the survival of our species.
Thanks for the sound crit.
always welcomed. good to be back. God to see you around.
In ink,
Dabbler
Funny, I didn't take this to
Funny, I didn't take this to be preaching, just a reminder to humanity that by putting others first, the world would be a better place. I also whole heartedly agree with your version Weirdelf, to me, the message didn't matter which person it was written in.
Jx