Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Nov 05, 2010

CAUGHT BETWEEN

The cracks of longing
and the tears of goodbye

The pain of losing
and the need not to cry

The realisation of loss great enough
to make you want to die

The dumbing down of knowing
that love has passed you by...

BB 5 November, '10

TITLE TAKEN FROM A SONG BY TOTO

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down

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Comments

lou

lou

14 years 5 months ago

Bitter sweet perfection.

Lou. Xx

judyanne

how i can relate

just the line 'enormous enough to die' threw me a little
can you think of another way to say this?
perhaps:
'The realisation of enormous loss
enough for one to want to die'

love judy
xxxx

Bonitaj

Nice to see you all again! Judy - keen eye there... I edited it as best I could. Not ideal, but just a slip of a poem anyway!
CHeers
Boni