marvelous just marvy
Neopoets I shall join,
from an outstanding players
point of view
shall enter and see
what loved can do
I walk an isolated path yes
but success I can never beget
as Loved lives in this skin
misunderstood mostly
But I shall now begin
and
participate through thick and thin
just let me join in
Here I send my inner voice
to speak aloud
and hope you will not shout
again
my way
Comments
loved
one fantastic poem and incredibly well-crafted. your changes in verb tense are spot-on and effective. your ability to write this great cry of self, sans punctuation -- I admire that!
Thank you friend
I read yours maiden this morning I think
Now I have also taken the dramatic challenge
of Snowmans workshop
and have just now
posted my maiden contribution
.The punctuation ignored here were just by accident,
though as a poet I don't pay much attention
to either grammar or punctuation
Poetry is different to prose.
sans all but emotion
an innate creation
not by articulation ..
My opinion only
as I have been composing ///since past six decades
Many don't know here
what is a ''''decade''
mostly /many
still consider me
soil worth just a spade....
hope you won't
with your experience..
Yeh!
Brilliant poem! - you hit the jackpot. Great that you've joined a workshop! :) :)
Go for it!
Love Mand xxx
your and Ians hammer worked
I have already posted in SNOWMAN'S workshop
do read
and guide ...help with any corrections
u feel
thanks in advance